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The speaker, though paid $15,000
for an afternoon of talk, probably felt that the egg on his face was
not worth it, and he must still be wondering how a person once all
powerful could be subjected to such ignominy. |
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The speaker, though paid $15,000
for an afternoon of talk, probably felt that the egg on his face was
not worth it. He must still be wondering how a person once all powerful
could be subjected to such ignominy. |
The immediate effects of the new economic
policies have been to strike a bit of terror in the hearts of government
workers, to plant smiles on the faces of the rich, and to put frowns
on the faces of the poor, who have long benefited from the federal
safety net. |
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The new economic policies have had three
immediate effects. They have struck a bit of terror in the hearts
of government workers. They have planted smiles on the faces of the
rich. And they have put frowns on the faces or the poor, who have
long benefited from the federal safety net. |
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